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Post by The Don on Jul 21, 2007 8:23:12 GMT -5
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Post by cheddar on Jul 21, 2007 12:12:31 GMT -5
The Mann: "First of all you ain't Diddy why you change your name You a kid homie I aint got the time for games"
not a whole lot to it, but it works
"First it was prodigy now its eternal. Its time for school boy open up ya' journal"
these two lines have nothing to do with each other, pretty weak bar
"This is an easy victory I'm on to round 2 You so bad its contagious I cant be around you"
this works, but not a strong punch
"You a poet not a rapper step out the arena If you step down now I'll pretend I never seen ya"
strong bar
"Your loss was destiny boy "It was written" How can you compare to the lines that I'm spittin"
kinda weak, the "it was written" doesnt have any thing connected to it relating to Nas or anything so there really was no point to it.
"and, yo mom was lyin when she said you was nice In reality you aint nothin but the next vanilla ice."
vanilla ice jokes are played out...
Eternal: "You step and wanna battle with the esscense of writers finds I can give you one chance and one hour, to climb in to my mind"
doesnt really make sense
"Thought's you can't comprehend leavin you beggin for death Scarin you like Dick Cheney with a shotgun on meth, and what's left"
not terrible, but not great
"Of your feeble intellegence, is nothin but repressed memories of your parent's negligence So i'm stealin this crown straight from your hands, and at the same time, I'm stealin all your fans"
not bad, but they dont relate to each other, so there was no need for the word "so"
"Yea I'm the man, or more like the MaNN, That's right, along with the fan's, I'm stealing your name You don't deserve it, why?, because you will never achieve fame"
decent bar the word achieve messes up the flow a little though.
"But it's all the same, I can lyrically murder you, and get reported for homicide But you felt no pain, my lyrics already numbed you like massive amounts of Ethyl Chloride"
the rhyme wasnt strong, but nevertheless a good bar
"You're like a retard, droolin at the sight of a genius So I give you a dime for ice cream, because I'm only a little feindish"
the "because im only a little fiendish" didnt sound great but the rest of the bar was good.
vote=the mann
it was extremely close and I read it like 6 times just to determine who won, but in the end it came down to whos sounded better and had better rhymes.
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Post by The Don on Jul 21, 2007 12:32:45 GMT -5
Flow: Neither was great, but eternals was stretched in places, so MANN
Punches: Only real punch from mann was the weak vanilla ice one, so ETERNAL gets this, mainly for "But it's all the same, I can lyrically murder you, and get reported for homicide But you felt no pain, my lyrics already numbed you like massive amounts of Ethyl Chloride"
Multies: didnt look like there were any at first, but on closer look MANN had round-2, around-you. not exactly a good one, but better than none
Wordplay: none
Creativity: very little, but ETERNAL gets it, again for the ethyl chloride line
Personals: all eternal had was a brief mention of manns name. so MANN gets it for reference to his name changes
Overrall: close, but not in a good way. i expected more, especially from eternal. MANN gets my vote
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Post by versatai on Jul 21, 2007 22:38:52 GMT -5
I gotta give this one BARELY to Eternal. To me, The Mann's verse just felt forced. Neither were very personal at all, and there were little to no multies or wordplay, but the Ethyl Chloride line was nice. I also appreciated the Dick Cheney line. Didn't feel as forced to me. Vote goes to Eternal, but not by much. Like the other two said, I kind of expected more.
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Post by mymphisgold101 on Jul 22, 2007 0:30:41 GMT -5
The Mann had a really good verse. Nice punches, nice wordplay, nice rhymes. Your opener and closer were well done.
Eternal had some good rhymes but had no punches that really...well, packed a punch. I liked your verse though, don't get me wrong. I hope you don't take anything bad away from this man. I respect both of you guys.
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Post by alter on Jul 22, 2007 12:23:44 GMT -5
v/Mann
his was a battle verse. E had more lyricism in a way, and was nice. but it did fuck all in terms of damage
was probs stronger.. but no damage
v/mann
act like ya know lol
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Post by Rara Avis on Jul 23, 2007 21:33:54 GMT -5
meh. what can i say. i'm not a battle rapper.
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Post by emceethunder on Jul 23, 2007 22:03:21 GMT -5
The MaNN had more punch and kick in his verses, and it was very much compiled effectively, and Eternals was weaker, but trying to hit him hard,So, i give this on to The MaNN.
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Post by alter on Jul 24, 2007 9:26:13 GMT -5
shouldnt we close this?
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Post by Rara Avis on Jul 24, 2007 17:25:05 GMT -5
yea. ill do it.
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