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Post by tradamus on Apr 1, 2008 0:46:08 GMT -5
i suffer hell in my soul and my flesh i suffer from eyes to see the cold and the death i wonder do i write to not go mad? or on the contrary to go mad to understand the nature of my madness to understand the nature of my conscience Feel wrong for not havin' Faith, but i think its Childish Feel wrong for not havin' trust, in those that i comply with Feel im where i belong dead but thus, an illusion that is dangerous Never will i forgive the world for pushin me against the wall Never will i forget the depths of the mirror, most of all Saw a corpse was contemplating me The raw look in his eyes, has never left me... Knew that i was no longer arguin with me but Death itself, Truth sat by along death already chosen by myself... No tears or nothin' within me, but deep inside me if i could search the of recesses of my conscience I'd find somethin' like Free at last, but its nonsense... Just an illusion.. Triggered by the writing process so do i write to not go mad, or to go mad? to fully understand whats within is what it brought Simple Delusion of my thoughts or, dead inside from distraught?
[Free at last] means if i was some how able to look deep into myself while i was dead i would find this feeling.. no sadness, just free...
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Post by drzeke on Apr 4, 2008 23:37:28 GMT -5
Y'know...It's a good concept but it doesn't fit together quite right. Work on the wording a bit, it's not there yet...but it could be.
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Post by Steven Edward on Apr 8, 2008 8:41:07 GMT -5
Wow I thought this was Kinda Deep I like the Concept Also it's cool I disagrre I feel it went together I see What you were gettin at Y'know sounds Like you could be goin through some Ish Hope every Things Good with You. 1
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Post by tradamus on May 13, 2008 12:19:33 GMT -5
ain't been on here in a minute.. Good looks on the feedback, i appreciate it real talk
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Post by aiden on Dec 22, 2010 6:30:58 GMT -5
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